A pair of potentially pressing perplexing problems in a possibly penultimate draft

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Being done with this rewrite is almost a reality; emphasis on the word ‘almost’.

There’s this one scene that’s really bothering me. Something about it feels very…off.  It’s necessary in that it wraps up a subplot, but the way it’s written feels less ‘show’ and more ‘tell’.

I’m not exactly sure how to handle this. The scene still works, but part of me thinks it could be better and another part wonders if it should stay as is. This is definitely going to require some figuring out.

One unfortunate side effect of making changes is it will most likely drag things out and make the script longer, which really is the last thing I need right now.

Which brings me to another issue.

This is at least 7-10 pages too long, so the next step after all the writing is done is to hack, slash and rewrite this down to a more agreeable length.  I don’t want a potentially interested party to be put off by the number of pages before even starting to read it. (Although in my defense, this is a real page-turner of a script)

I don’t like setting deadlines for myself, but with the end of the year looming, the rest of the month seems like a good opportunity to really wrap this script up once and for all.  I’ve been in contact with a professional writer who gives notes, so that’s where it’ll go when all is said and done.

Which will most likely lead to more rewriting, but you and I knew that was going to happen anyway.

6 Responses to A pair of potentially pressing perplexing problems in a possibly penultimate draft

  1. N.G. Davis says:

    Hey, you’ve admitted something’s wrong and have identified what it is. That’s the hard part. The “why” will follow. Good luck with it!

  2. Brian Drake says:

    Maybe it needs to be 7 to 10 pages too long. Just send it out and see what happens. You’re never going to hit a grand slam on the first submission so just because it gets rejected 1000 times doesn’t mean it isn’t just right as-is. Striving for perfection = perpetually unsold.

    • Maximum Z says:

      I’ll send it out after I fix that scene, tweak another and do one round of editing. I agree about biting the bullet and accepting the length for whatever it is. Still planning on sticking to my end-of-year deadline. After that, I’m done.

  3. …the letter P, and the number, 2. This is why I don’t believe in the rewrite, actually. Writing an average of one page a day gives you roughly 3-4 useable scripts per year.

    But that’s my thing.

    For you, I would say, go forth, and sin no more. Or, you can go fifth. It doesn’t really matter. What you think you have to do is what you must do. Life is a Nike commercial. Just Do It!

    Did you feel the woosh?

    If not, you’re heading into the wind. Sounds like a course correction is in order. So, some practical advice disguised as a morning rant or pages, whatever you’d like to call it:

    Take the scene out all together.

    A dangling subplot is better than your narrator telling the story. I say you can wrap up this subplot in a further scene down the road.

    ANd I say this as a new reader to your blog, my new Linked In friend.

    • Maximum Z says:

      Thanks for the follow!

      Regarding the scene in question, it was two characters talking about how something happened offscreen. I hated it, and have since changed it so we see the main character doing said action.

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